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straycat
6th-September-2006, 12:58 PM
Trish's thread on 'Are forumites more poetic (http://www.cerocscotland.com/forum/showthread.php?t=9533)' made me wonder whether a Haiku thread might be in order. For those who don't know, haiku originate in Japan, and are short (17 syllables or less) non-rhyming poems, which making reference to the seasons or nature in some way.

There's loads of rules on how to write haiku in English, but no concensus at all from what I can tell.
Some basic guidelines:


brevity [one to three lines totaling 17 syllables or less]
three lines -- some would insist of 5-7-5 syllable structure, some suggest a structure of three lines with 5 or less, 7 or less, 5 or less syllables.
when read aloud, can be completed in one breadth
avoidance of traditional English poetic forms, such as rhyming and metaphor.
juxtaposition … two elements or lines of the haiku indirectly relate to a third.
descriptiveness ... haiku describe, they don't prescribe or tell.


Couple of examples:


After the storm
A boy wiping the sky
From the tables



Railroad crossing bells
stop a mid-summer's day
from rushing on by


Anyone fancy writing some MJ related ones? I'll make a couple of stupid attempts to start off :really:


Blues in the night
A perfect partner
Leaves you breathless


Hot summer air
Crowded floor
Celine Dion kills the night


Stray
PS I know absolutely nothing about how to write good ones. I just like the idea.

DJ Andy
8th-September-2006, 11:43 PM
An interesting post Stray!:clap:
And it's harder than it looks! It's taken me 2 days to come up with these pathetic attempts.

DJ awaits requests
...Enrique...Mavericks...
long night stretches longer!


Teeming happy vibe
Danger lurks on the floor
stiletto stabs your foot!

I thenkew! :grin:

spindr
9th-September-2006, 10:56 AM
There's also The Taxi Dancer's Lament (http://www.thehobbyarchive.com/new-520006-36.html).

SpinDr

Beowulf
9th-September-2006, 03:36 PM
Outside hot sun shines;
Inside things getting steamy
As they dance the blues

Beowulf tries to spin
Size Eleven feet in the way
Bruises partner's toes.

straycat
10th-September-2006, 10:19 AM
Opening bars of magic
A stranger's warm smile
The next three minute affair

Juju
20th-September-2006, 06:37 PM
I posted a couple of daft ones on the "budding poets" thread...

Dancing in summer
Flower petals on the breeze
Dew under armpits

Nights are drawing in
Dancers flicker like firelight
Beats watching the soaps